You have a certain amount of freedom in deciding where to place
your modifiers in a sentence:
- We rowed the boat vigorously.
- We vigorously rowed the boat.
- Vigorously we rowed the boat.
However, you must be careful to avoid misplaced modifiers -- modifiers that are positioned so
that they appear to modify the wrong thing.
In fact, you can improve your writing quite a bit by paying
attention to basic problems like misplaced modifiers and
dangling modifiers.
Misplaced Words
In general, you should place single-word modifiers
near the word or words they modify, especially when a reader might
think that they modify something different in the
sentence. Consider the following
sentence:
- [WRONG] After our conversation lessons, we could understand the
Spanish spoken by our visitors from Madrid easily.
Do we understand the Spanish easily, or do the
visitors speak it easily? This revision eliminates the
confusion:
- [RIGHT] We could easily understand the Spanish spoken
by our visitors from Madrid.
It is particularly important to be careful about where you put
limiting modifiers. These are words like
"almost," "hardly," "nearly," "just," "only,"
"merely," and so on. Many writers regularly misplace these
modifiers. You can accidentally change the entire
meaning of a sentence if you place these modifiers next
to the wrong word:
- [WRONG] Randy has nearly annoyed every professor he has
had. (he hasn't "nearly annoyed" them)
- [WRONG] We almost ate all of the Thanksgiving turkey.
(we didn't "almost eat" it)
- [RIGHT] Randy has annoyed nearly every professor he has
had.
- [RIGHT] We ate almost all of the Thanksgiving
turkey.
Misplaced Phrases and Clauses
It is important that you place the modifying phrase or
clause as close as possible to the word or words it
modifies:
- [WRONG] By accident, he poked the little girl with his finger
in the eye.
- [WRONG] I heard that my roommate intended to throw a surprise
party for me while I was outside her bedroom
window.
- [WRONG] After the wedding, Ian told us at his stag
party that he would start behaving like a responsible adult.
- [RIGHT] By accident, he poked the little girl in the
eye with his finger.
- [RIGHT] While I was outside her bedroom window, I
heard that my roommate intended to throw a surprise party for
me.
- [RIGHT] Ian told us at his stag party that he would start
behaving like a responsible adult after the
wedding.
Squinting Modifiers
A squinting modifier is an ambiguously placed
modifier that can modify either the word before it or the
word after it. In other words, it is "squinting" in both
directions at the same time:
- [WRONG] Defining your terms clearly strengthens your
argument. (does defining "clearly strengthen" or does "defining
clearly" strengthen?)
- [RIGHT] Defining your terms will clearly strengthen your
argument. OR A clear definition of your terms
strengthens your argument.
Split Infinitives
The infinitive form of the verb consists
of the word "to" followed by the base form of the verb: "to
be," "to serve," "to chop," etc. Inserting a word or
words between the "to" and the verb of an infinitive creates what
is known as a split infinitive. Prescriptive
grammarians, who knew Latin grammar better than English, once decreed
that a split infinitive was an error, but now it is
growing increasingly acceptable even in formal writing. Nevertheless,
some careful writers still prefer to avoid splitting infinitives
altogether.
In general, you should avoid placing long, disruptive
modifiers between the "to" and the verb of an
infinitive. However, you must use your judgement when it comes to
single-word modifiers. Sometimes a sentence becomes awkward if a
single-word modifier is placed anywhere but between the elements of
the infinitive:
- [WRONG] The marketing team voted to, before they launched
the new software, run an anticipatory ad campaign. (disruptive
-- the infinitive should not be split)
- [RIGHT] The marketing team voted to run an anticipatory ad
campaign before they launched the new software.
Dangling Modifiers
The dangling modifier, a persistent and
frequent grammatical problem in writing, is often (though not always)
located at the beginning of a sentence. A dangling
modifier is usually a phrase or an elliptical clause -- a dependent clause whose subject and verb are
implied rather than expressed -- that functions as an
adjective but does not modify any specific word in the
sentence, or (worse) modifies the wrong
word. Consider the following example:
- Raised in Nova Scotia, it is natural to miss the smell
of the sea.
The introductory phrase in the above
sentence looks as if it is meant to modify a person or
persons, but no one is mentioned in the sentence. Such
introductory adjective phrases, because of their
position, automatically modify the first noun or
pronoun that follows the phrase -- in this case,
"it." The connection in this case is illogical because "it"
was not raised in Nova Scotia. You could revise the
sentence in a number of ways:
- For a person raised in Nova Scotia, it is natural
to miss the smell of the sea. (the phrase no longer
functions as an adjective)
- Raised in Nova Scotia, I often miss the smell of
the sea. (the phrase functions as an
adjective but now automatically modifies "I," a
logical connection)
A dangling modifier can also appear when you place an
elliptical clause improperly:
- Although nearly finished, we left the play early
because we were worried about our sick cat.
The way this sentence is structured, the
clause "Although nearly finished" illogically
modifies "we," the pronoun directly following the
clause. An easy way to rectify the problem is to
re-insert the subject and verb that are
understood in the elliptical clause:
- Although the play was nearly finished, we left
early because we were worried about our sick cat.
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