Starting a new paragraph is a signal to your reader
that you are beginning a new thought or taking up a new point. Since
your outline will help you divide the essay into
sections, the resulting paragraphs must correspond to the
logical divisions in the essay. If your paragraphs are
too long, divide your material into smaller, more manageable units; if
they're too short, find broader topic sentences that will
allow you to combine some of your ideas.
Look at the list of sentences below:
- In preparation for study some students apportion a negligible
period of time to clearing off a desk, a table, a floor; others must
scrub all surfaces and clean all toilet bowls within 50 meters before
the distraction of dirt disappears.
- Some eat or pace while they work.
- Some work with deep concentration, others more fitfully.
- Students might smoke, or chew their nails, or stare blankly at
walls or at computer screens.
- If asked what space is reserved for learning, many students
would suggest the classroom, the lab or the library.
- The kitchen, and the bedroom function as study spaces.
- Some people need to engage in sports or other physical activity
before they can work successfully.
- Being sedentary seems to inspire others.
- Although most classes are scheduled between 8:30 and 22:00, some
students do their best work before the sun rises, some after it sets.
- Some need a less flexible schedule than others, while a very few
can sit and not rise until their task is completed.
- Some students work quickly and efficiently, while others cannot
produce anything without much dust and heat.
Were these sentences simply combined they would yield
nothing but a long list of facts, not obviously related to one
another, except that they all refer to students and the way we study.
There is too much information here to include in one
paragraph. The solution is to develop two topic sentences under which all (or most) of the above information
will fit.
- For most students the process of studying involves establishing a
complex set of rituals which come to be repeated, with little
variation, every time a task is assigned by a professor.
If we add the first five sentences to this topic sentence we have a unified but general description of the types
of "rituals" or study patterns which are such an important part
of academic life.
- For most students the process of studying involves establishing
a complex set of rituals which come to be repeated, with little
variation, every time a task is assigned by a professor. In
preparation for study some students apportion a negligible period of
time to clearing off a desk, a table, a floor; others must scrub all
surfaces and clean all toilet bowls within 50 meters before the
distraction of dirt disappears. Some eat or pace while they work.
Some work with deep concentration, others more fitfully. Students
might smoke, or chew their nails, or stare blankly at walls or at
computer screens.
The rest of the sentences are more specific. They
concern the distribution of individual time, space and effort, and
relate the rituals involved in study to those less commonly associated
with school. A topic sentence might look something like
this:
- Work tends, therefore, to be associated with non-work-specific
environments, activities, and schedules. If asked what space is
reserved for learning, many students would suggest the classroom, the
lab or the library. What about the kitchen? The bedroom? In fact, any
room in which a student habitually studies becomes a learning space,
or a place associated with thinking. Some people need to engage in
sports or other physical activity before they can work successfully.
Being sedentary seems to inspire others. Although most classes are
scheduled between 8:30 and 22:00, some students do their best work
before the sun rises, some after it sets. Some need a less flexible
schedule than others, while a very few can sit and not rise until
their task is completed. Some students work quickly and efficiently,
while others cannot produce anything without much dust and
heat.
Some organisation and a couple of topic sentences have
transformed a long and undifferentiated listing of student activities
into two unified paragraphs with a logical division
between them.
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